Since the Imago came…
From the porch swing I can see miasma painting the sky grey as the sun falls. I know I should hate the color like I do every other gray thing in this world since the Imago came, but the way it swirls is nothing less than beautiful.
Tomorrow’s the day. Tomorrow Jax will leave to fight the Imago. Tomorrow I may never see him again.
Our minds share strong synchronicity. He knows I’m thinking about him, because he steps from the house and onto the porch.
He gives me a hesitant smile, and I mirror it back. He doesn’t speak as he sits next to me. He takes my hand and I sigh. I love the way his hand fits into mine.
“It’s going to work. We’re going to beat them,” Jax’s husky voice holds me tight.
“You don’t know for sure. What if you don’t come back?” I whisper.
Jax answers me with a kiss. He skips the sweet soft beginning and jumps right to the hot hungry middle. His kisses fill me to my lacuna, until there isn’t one part that doesn’t belong to him. I oscitate and try to catch my breath.
“I’ll be back,” he promises.
This is my 200 word entry for Rachel Harrie’s 2nd Campaigner Challenge. I got in early *cheers*, I'm number 14!
The Challenge is:
Write a blog post in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, whether flash fiction, non-fiction, humorous blog musings, poem, etc. The blog post should:
· include the word "imago" in the title (DONE)
· include the following 4 random words: "miasma," "lacuna," "oscitate," "synchronicity," (DONE)
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional and included in the word count), make reference to a mirror in your post. (DONE)
For those who want an even greater challenge (optional), make your post 200 words EXACTLY! (DONE)
And can I just say…Holy Cow those words were hard!
-Angie
46 comments:
I hope he'll be back, I hope they'll win -- you tell a good story!
Cool! I haven't even seen the 2nd challenge yet! I am totally slacking. This is great though. I love the story. You definitely get my vote!
This is a sweet story Angie. I am rooting for them and for him to come home;)
Loved this! It definitely gets my vote! :D
Very natural use of the words. Didn't feel forced at all. Nice!
I hope he gets home safe. Good job on using all the words. This definitely felt like much more of a challenge than the first! Well done!
Now I want to know what the Imago is. According to definition, you seem to mean it in an entirely different way. Interest piqued. I wants more.
Great job, Angie! :)
Bravo! Wow, way to go the distance! I'm impressed! :)
...I love the way his hand fits into mine...
...but the way it swirls is nothing less than beautiful.
Great sentences! ~ Nadja
Good job incorporating all the words!
Well done, Angie!
Lovely imagery & emotion.
Yes, those are not easy word to weave in such a short space. Good job!
Whoa! Great job, Angie!
I love the way you worked the mirror in there. I forgot the mirror part. Mine is #29
Well done! This is the first romantic-y post I've seen, and it worked well.
yeah! and i liked the intensity of the scene, will he defeat it? but more importantly will he return alive!
Love it! Be still my romantic heart :) Great job getting those words in there.
Angie, nice use of Imago! Loved the interpretation. Great job! I'm #34.
Great job getting all those words in, and I love your world-building here. Reading this makes me want to know more! What is the Imago? Where did it come from, and how do you fight it? I like this a lot!
I'm # 3.
So sad! Like the use of the words.
Very nice, you made me want to read more! ; )
Now I want to know what the Imago is. More, please!
Fantastic! I love how you used the words in an original way. I also like the tension and heat of the piece. You have my Like vote!
Lacuna sounds creepy
I hope they win the battle. This was a suspenseful piece.
Awesome job Angie! I followed your story perfectly which has been hard to do with the crazy words:)
Very romantic! Love it!
Tension, suspense, romance... there's a lot in this short piece! Well done!
I love how he skips to the hot hungry middle! This is very intense, I loved it! It's one of my favorites so far! I want to know what happens next!
Yes! Love the romance and the kiss, well, the kiss makes the piece. Great job!
Good job!
I LOVE it. Going to vote for you. This line is great: He skips the sweet soft beginning and jumps right to the hot hungry middle.
You go, girl!
You have created a wonderful story. I enjoyed it.
I'm really enjoying reading these challenge entries, this is great.
Ooooh this was so good! It reminded me a little of David and Goliath..I'm liking!
Great story and "holy cow" I agree with you on those damn words! Liked the hot hungry middle! I'm #133.
Very sweet. I want to know these two so much more. Great entry.
I really enjoyed your entry. Nicely done! :)
Hey, good kiss! I like the skipping the beginning thingy. I'm over from the campaign, number #142. Cheers!
Angie, are you kidding me?! I loved this so much! I want to know what happened before and what happens next. Can you get on that?
Oh yum! Love the way he skips the soft beginning...
I really hope he comes back.
Oooh, great ending and spectacular way to describe a kiss. More please. ;)
Hot mama! Good job.
Oh does he make it back? I want to keep reading!
Awww, I want to read more. Will he come back? Love the exploration of characters you have in such a short piece. Nice work.
Mine is 176
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